The day lights up like a burning torch inside dark caves
calm ripples get ready for soaring and crashing waves.
Sunlights explode and spew out like a party champaign
Spirit of ruffled sea flows into crashing waves.
Carved through the path of time, tracing across golden sand
the endless shores are shaped, sparkling in crashing waves.
No other forces shall refresh or kindle my soul
more than the power and grace of ocean's crashing waves.
Bound in dance with the moon, an icy mass of glow, are
rising up to tap on star-specked night - the crashing waves.
1.) Is the poem written as separate sets of couplets?
ReplyDeleteYes
2.) Are each of the couplets a complete thought (sentence)?
Yes
3.)Is each couplet a separate idea, image, etc.?
Yes
4.)What is the rhyme scheme? Does it fit the definition of a Ghazal?
AB, CB, DB, EB, FB - Yes
5.)What is the refrain? Is it repeated in each couplet?
"crashing waves" - Yes
6.)Does each couplet share the same rhythm (number of syllables)?
13,13 13,12 13,13 13,13 13,13 - Yes, except the 4th line it only has 12
7.)What is good about this poem?
I really like how each stanza has a different idea but is somehow connected by the imagery
8.)What could the author do to improve the poem? Be specific.
The wording of the 4th line and the last stanza kind of confuse me. Maybe you could try rewording them but not by much.
9.)Using the rubric I gave you at the beginning of the unit, what grade would you give this poem? Why? Be specific.
I would give tis poem a 5 because the wording is magnificent. I can really visualize the scenes you are writing about. I can also just feel the ocean breeze and hear the crashing waves you are describing.
**REALLY great poem Gina!!! I am very impressed with it. I almost wish that I could write as well as you.