suck in frosty air.
Peaks aloft
race to the sky.
Wind blusters
and whacks an eagle.
Craggy icebergs
a lazy float -
and next to them,
A caribou shiversits magnificent antlers.
At night,
when every life
is asleep
Deep green and navy
aurora
drifts along the night.
1.) What score would the word choice used in this poem earn?
ReplyDeleteThis poem deserves a 5.
2.) Why do you say this?
The words are...
*specific and accurate; its easy to understand
*words and phrases catch reader's eye and linger
*language and phrasing is natural, effective, and appropriate
*lively verbs and specific nouns add depth
*choice in language enhance the meaning
*writer has taken care to put the right word or phrase in just the right place
3.) What is the best line of this poem?
The best line of this poem is...
"Craggy icebergs a lazy float -"
4.) Why do you think it is good?
When I read this I can almost picture the icebergs floating, and feel the Alaskan coldness
5.) What could the poet do to improve this poem?
To improve this poem the poet could fix the last stanza- it doesn't make much sense grammatically
*Over all, GREAT poem Gina. It really made me picture in my mind the Alaskan winter. In fact, I nearly started shivering.
1. I would give a word choice out of five for this poem because she uses striking words and phrases that catches the reader’s eye and linger in the reader’s mind.
ReplyDelete2. I loved it! I especially liked the lively verbs in her poem since it gave extra energy that created a vivid picture in the reader’s mind.
3. I like the sentence “At night, when every life is asleep”.
4. This is because it calms the reader and gives a sense of serenity to the poem. Not only that, it makes the reader think about what the author was really trying to convey. I thought to myself that it could simply mean animals resting in the winter, or something completely different such as the silent innocence of winter.
5. I think it’d even be better if you work on making your poem flow more naturally. Though the words all roll off my tongue smoothly, I think the verse that I thought was the best line of this poem was putted in an awkward placement (At night, when every life is asleep”). Other than that, I loved your poem overall!
-Hanna Park 9D