Near peaceful town of Grindelwald
a peak of Alps high and steep
befriended with azure splendor -
stands lonely the Bachalpsee
none shall fathom its beauty.Formless icy mass of chill
a mirror, so pellucid
a glacier, so tranquil
stands lonely the Bachalpsee
none shall fathom its beauty.Blue petals rotated around
the stem that elegantly sits
on gravels and khaki grasses
stands lonely the Bachalpsee
none shall fathom its beauty.As center, holds life in peace
Flowers here, snowy hills there
Tacitly does its duty of nature
stands lonely the Bachalpsee
none shall fathom its beauty.Footsteps come, footsteps go
Scale the mountains and vast lands
but no one looks at the silent lake
stands lonely the Bachalpsee
none shall fathom its beauty.
1. Rather than being a narrative poem, I think this is more of a "read between the lines poem" without a major story being told. However, I think the major conflict of the story is not noticing the beauty of nature- the trees, the forests.
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3. The refrain she uses is: "none shall fathom its beauty", and I think its this last sentence of each stanza that grabs the reader's attention. It also helps move the poem along by making us realize the message the author is trying to send us- especially because its short and bold!
4. The rhythm she used in this poem is consisted of mostly 4 beats, and I think it creates a quite symbolic rhythm to the ballad- especially because its the same in each line (refer to #2).
5. I think the author's grammar and punctuation is really well done!! She uses the comma at just the right moments, and I think it really strengths the clarity of the poem. And because there are no commas at the end of each sentence, it makes her poem look more organized.
6. I think this is a truly lovely poem! It makes me reflect how beautiful and innocent nature is. However, I think writing a specific narrative story would help to bring the beauty out of nature more, too.
7. With a score out of five, I would give her a score of five for her word choice! I think her language is the best skill she applied in her poem, because she used adjectives and verbs that was just simply colorful and real. It really helped the reader imagine the scene and the beauty of nature. It's amazing how she uses accurate words but still not makes it sound too wordy! :)
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